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I'm tired of this.
        Tired of the warmcold relationship that we have.
        Tired of the embers that are all that remain from our blaze.
                 Tired of the falling ashes.

I'm tired of you.
        Tired of your warmcold moods.
        Tired of your fake smiles that remain untouched.
                 Tired of your pristine beauty.

                  We're little more than a fading dream. I'm waking up.
                                         I'm not that naïve.
:iconwanderinghere:
i feel warmcold this sunny day but
i'm not that n.a.i.v.e.




For #theWrittenRevolution members: is the repetition of the word "tired" too much? or just right?
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:iconorenasher:
I totally have been there. Great poem. :thumbsup:
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:iconeatingmyownfears:
The repetition of the word 'tired' serves to amplify the meaning of the poem. Love it! :love:

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*KJ-Illustration Feb 25, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
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No, absolutely not ~! The way it's repeated gives it it's nessecary strenght and beauty :] You're a really talented writer :heart: Beautiful works!
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:iconwanderinghere:
thankyouthankyouthankyou! ah, you're so nice! :heart:
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*KJ-Illustration Feb 26, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
:blush: you're incredibly welcome, love ~!!:iconsqueeeplz:
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:iconmegdaly:
I'm obsessed with this poem. I think the repetition of "tired" is just right. The simplicity of the poem makes it very relatable; I'm sure that many people can relate to these feelings (myself included).
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:iconwanderinghere:
thankyouthankyouthankyou! you're amazing! (just saying)
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