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              Come a little bit closer, hear what I have to say,
       Like little children sleeping, we can dream this night away.
                               [paint splatters covering the walls]
                                              [shattered china tea cups]
                                                    [empty carousels]

                                         [repeat after me: i am free]

                                               [kissing without a sound]
                                                   [he loves me not's]
                                  [and the record twirling round and round]


      There is a full moon rising, so let's go dancing in the light,
We know where the music's playing, let's go out and feel the night.
i only stay up for you.



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are the phrases in the middle a distraction from the original flow? are the rhymes forced?
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distraction, i dunno, but they definitely fit there. you need them.

no, they arent. they seem like some old lullaby, something less personal or maybe more personal, depending on how you look at it, and the phrases in the middle tell the story.

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